Hello, dear readers!
Last year, I participated in the challenging and extremely fun Voice Week — and now I’m here to do it again!
Voice Week is an experimental writing challenge to help us stretch our versatility in voice and tone. Each Voice Week participant writes five versions of the same story (about 100 words in length) — from five different points of view. Then, in the first week of October, we post, compare, sharpen, and grow.
It is organised by the BeKindRewrite Inspiration Monday team, and we’ll all be passing comment on each others’ stories. And it’s not to late to join in, if you wish! Head on over to the Voice Week Homepage and sign up, or just peruse through the other wonderful works posted there.
My entry to last year’s challenge, Angel in a Wedding Dress, was written in the third-person, so I’m going to shake things up a bit and do first-person this time ’round. Any comments are greatly appreciated!
.. Hell Beneath Us ..
The grain is dry and lifeless beneath my tread. Normally, the befallen tragedy of famine would spur me into action, to breathe life into that for which I am praised.
But not now.
I turn a dead gaze upon the soil and watch with a barren fascination as the land becomes frozen without the favour of my heart. I can hear the whispered pleas of man resonating within my soul, but I shall pay them no heed.
Not now.
Not until my daughter is returned to me. Not until she rises through the shadowy dead and frozen earth to take solace in my arms.
For now, I wait.
- Love The Bad Guy
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This is a bitter, angry, grieving, interesting ultimatum. Feels like a mother to me, versus a father. I’m not sure why. Look forward to the rest!
A mother, indeed — and feeling all those things. Thank you for the comment!
This is rather sad…
Then my job here is done.
Wow!
Love your writing style… Like a relic!
Is it nature? Is it the clouds?
Is it some man with supernatural powers? Or God?
Who is the daughter?
Very different and intriguing!
Thank you so much for the kind words! I’m glad you picked up on the otherworldly context (I’m loving the word “relic”…). I hope I continue to please with the following voices.
This piece is so different than last years. I can almost taste bitter bile in my mouth as I read this.
Thank you, Billie! I definitely wanted to try for something a bit different from last year’s, so I’m glad you enjoyed it.
I absolutely love the sorrowful vibe I got from reading this. It’s bleak and poetic and I’m very much looking forward to today’s piece!
=)
Thank you very much.
I hope you enjoy Part Two!
it sounds like a play on the greek myth involving Persephone and Hades. The ever lasting winter until she is freed for a brief moment to bring Spring back to the world.
If there was an emoticon to represent a person tapping their nose to imply some form of mutual understanding, I would use that.
I’ll settle for winky face.
Thanks for the comment!
I was thinking the same thing!!
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Wow! Nice one!
Could be a mere mortal, could be someone special, could even be a god or god-like being, the possible interpretations are many. I really like the way you’ve written this out and though I’m a little late to this party, I’m gonna now go and read all the parts of this!
Cheers.
The timing would never bother me; I’m happy that you’re taking the time to read them now.
Thank you very much for the kind words.