Continuing with my Voice Week story — here’s Part Two! Huge thanks to everyone who commented or liked the first part. One of my commenters hit the nail on the head with her interpretation; the story may come more into the light with this voice.
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.. Hell Beneath Us ..
Though the sinful thoughts would never pass my lips, the truth is that I envy Man. Indeed, they are mortal, short-lived and weak. But despite their vulnerability, these earthbound beings are loyal and true.
We, meanwhile, demonstrate no such familial bondage. I acknowledge this, but cannot declare myself to be unique; I succeeded my brothers and took control as supreme ruler, and did so before the spilt blood of my father had ceased dripping from my hands.
When my brother sought my help in taking a wife, I thought of Man’s kinship and could not refuse. But my actions have brought chaos from the shadows.
Truly, there is no place for kinship amongst Gods.
- Love The Bad Guy
I read the other to make sure I guessed the premise correctly. The other person was clear, but the only thing I gathered is this one is a god who envies humans. I really like your word choices here, “But my actions have brought chaos from the shadows” A longing of a god to have a familial bond, but it goes awry. Nice.
Thank you for taking the time to comment.
I admit, I played around with the idea of this character, so his ambiguity is understandable. But I’m glad you’re enjoying the story!
I feel longing, yet a cold distance, and certainly regret, all contrasting yesterday’s grief beautifully. A complex piece.
Thank you very much. I’m glad I’m managing to make each voice unique.
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Lots of anger….and perhaps some envy
Most definitely anger, as is expected from such a powerful character. The hidden envy is something I decided to add on my own. Thanks for reading!
there is loneliness in being up there …
There most certainly is. Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment!
This is bleak, poetic and just plain incredible. Your writing is amazing.
I’m really looking forward to today’s.
=)
Thank you so much for the kind words! I am just about the post Part Three — I hope you enjoy!
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A God who envies humans… this is unique!
And the reasons are so believable! Good work!
Thank you muchly, Parul!
Nicely handled, really works with the first part as and builds a good character.
I like the Grecian-mythos feeling that seems to come from this, always been fond of that – though this could in principle apply to a lot of them, it seems most connectible to the Greek and maybe Nordic myths.
You’ve definitely picked up the vibe I was going for.